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planting trees is very important for the environment .some people say trees should be planted in the vacant area of cities and towns while other believes housing facilities should be built instead do you agree or disagree?

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In these modern times, it is a known fact that majority of the
people
 and concerned about the
environment
, and the adverse impact it can have on our health. Whilst many
people
 agree that more
trees
 should be planted in the
cities
, there are
also
people
 who believe more
houses
 should be built in the
cities
. I totally agree that the vacant spaces should be utilised for planting
trees
. On
one
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hand
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 with the overpopulation of
cities
, it is important to build
houses
 in order to satisfy the demand.
This
 is the main reason for
people
 to argue for increasing the building of
houses
.
For example
, the population in Mumbai is increasing rapidly with many
people
 from the rural areas, moving into the
cities
 for better opportunities resulting in a problem, as there is not enough space to accommodate everyone. Thereby, the city is forced to build more dwellings for
people
.
Such
 activity has detrimental effects on the
environment
, which in turn affects our health. Alternately,
people
 argue that it is more important to clean the air in many major
cities
 and
this
 can be done by the growing of
trees
. Even though our
cities
 require more condos to be built, we cannot deny the importance of
trees
 and the role they play in improving our
environment
 and air quality. An example of
this
 can be seen in New Delhi. New Delhi, is known to be one of the most polluted
cities
 in the world and every year during the “smog season”, many local residents lose their lives because of respiratory problems.
To conclude
, the building of
houses
 is important to meet the demand of occupants migrating to the major
cities
 but we cannot deny the effect
this
 is causing the
environment
. In my
opinion
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 the population should focus on the planting of more
trees
 so as to alleviate the surrounding conditions and to improve the air quality.
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