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Many people think that countries have a moral obligation to help each other, while others argue that aid money is misspent by the governments that receive it and therefore international aid should not be given to poor countries. Discuss these two points of view and give your opinion.

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It is indeed, a moral obligation for rich
countries
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 to extend some financial
aid
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 to poor ones. But, some populace contends that it is misused by the ministry of poor
countries
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. In my opinion,
aid
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 should be extended so that the impoverished
countries
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 grow. To commence with, providing financial
aid
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 is considered a commitment for better foreign relations and is done in various means. Mostly, help is awarded in the form of
money
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.
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 , India provides financial aids to dependent
countries
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 like Bhutan, Srilanka for them to establish developments like hospitals, bridges etc.
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 to that, rich
countries
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 do import and export with these
countries
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 so that they have a better income and profit. The needy nations are
also
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 supported by providing defence weapons like nuclear weapons, tanks etc.
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, providing aids to the needy nations help them in economical development and empowers their military defence as well. On contrary, some populace argues that the
money
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 gifted is not fully utilised for the notion of development
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 it is been misspent for other causes.
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, the
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aid
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 provided during disaster calamities sometimes are spent by authorities for their purposes and only the remaining amount is used to help people.
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 activities contradict the intention of helping the flood-affected areas and few places might not even be supplied with proper supplies because of lack of
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. To conclude, financial service helps the poor regions to grow and
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 it is good to continue doing the same.
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, it is
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 being misused by misspending it for personal requirements of authorities which is not desirable progress. Even though there are some downsides to providing
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, it is
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 important for the nations to develop. So, curbing the development of needy
countries
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 is not a solution to avoid misusing the funds.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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