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The internet will never replace traditional course books in schools. How far do you agree with this prediction?!

#internet #course #books #schools #prediction
For years now,the advancement of technology has
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 a huge impact
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 our social life.Several people assume that the network will never take over handbooks in academic places.In
this
 essay, I will elaborate on
this
 statement by giving examples and my opinion.
To begin
 with,most of the time different courses have been organised by human interaction,manual textbooks,pens etc.It is considered to be
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 efficient study way to help students improve their academic performance.Even the statistic
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 shown that by touching
the
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the pages of the book
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books
 pages you understand and improve more.
However
,the huge progress in
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the informatics
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 field gives us the
oportunity
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opportunity
 to take classes online,join in different courses by using only
eletronic
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electronic
 devices.Everything you need or want to learn is online and for free,so you
dont
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don't
 have to spend money on buying
books
,papers,notebooks etc.It is true that the
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internet
 has been a great
sourse
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source
 to find all kinds of information,but
i
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 believe that it can never teach you as a person will. Taking me as an example,in my past academic performance
i
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 have tried them both and I could tell with one which has more positive points and benefits.
Studing
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Studying
Standing
 face to face in a course is
definitly
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definitely
 better.You
leran
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learn
 from others mistakes,you actually understand
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information so
informations
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information
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 that you will
neevr
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never
 would by using the internet.I assume that the internet will never take
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control
 over the
handbooks
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couses
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courses
causes
. In conclusion,
internet
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the internet
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 and technology have a big influence
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on
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 our
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civilization
 everyday life but it can never
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affect
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effect
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affect
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the
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acadamic
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academic
 life.
Interent
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Internet
 can be a
helpfull
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helpful
 tool to learn more,but it can never be compared with
books
.
Furthermore
,
majority
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 of students are successfully achieving their goal by entirely relying on course
books
.
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