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tourism is one of the fastest growing industries and contributes a great deal to economies around the world. However, the damage tourism can cause to local cultures amd the environment is often ignored. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is considered that
tourism
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 industry is a major resource for
worldwide
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the worldwide
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 economy.
However
, some people think that
this
 industry can cause
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 impact on local cultures and their environment. I highly disagree with the
second
 point of view. In my opinion,
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 industry helps to popularize traditions, cultural attractions and contributes to the preservation of
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the cultural
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 heritage of a country.
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, nowadays national and local museums are more visited by tourists.
Consequently
, If
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 amount of
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 didn’t visit
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 of cultural attractions, they would be bankrupts. It means that the more cultural destinations are closed, the more local cultures are damaged.
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 Georgia has a great cultural heritage like local villages where they make traditional home wine and national dishes and their main living source is tourist’s money.
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, tourism can help to evolve local areas and bring a new life to the
long forgotten
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 cultural
centers
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.
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, it is a
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 fact that if not
travelers
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, who are highly interested in different cultural destinations like local villages, those rural places would be emptied because of the lack of money.
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, it is a stereotype that tourists usually leave a lot of garbage behind. The research has shown that citizens are the main reason for polluted local areas and tourists are more careful about the cultural heritage of other countries. In conclusion, tourism plays a vital role in
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regional development and helps to keep alive a lot of cultural destinations, which contributes to saving different traditions.
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