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Some people think its ok to benefit from animals, while others think they should not be exploited. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

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Some people think
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 ok to
benefit
 from
animals
, while others think they should not be exploited. Discuss both sides and give your opinion There is no doubt that
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animals
 are
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 important part of our ecosystem. Few people
believethat
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believe that
 it is natural to use
animals
 for one’s own
benefit
, while others argue that it’s a form of abuse. In
this
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 the former view. From times immemorial, human beings have been depending on
animals
. There is no doubt that we derive great
benefit
 from animal products like milk, medicines, nutritious food. Not only in terms
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 but
also
animals
 are widely used for transportation and agriculture. I think it is impossible to imagine our lives without the need to depend on
animals
.
For instance
, there is no true supplement for animal milk in terms of nutritional value and
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 goes for drugs that use animal products. As mentioned earlier, they form an important part of our ecosystem, and to
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 our ecosystems are designed in a way living beings
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 from one another and co-exist in harmony. Now that we have looked into why it is impossible for us to imagine life without benefiting from
animals
, let’s now switch to the other side of our argument.
In contrast
, there are few people who are of the opinion that
humans
 should refrain from exploiting
animals
. In my view, that’s true to an extent,
humans
 should not hunt or kill
animals
 for pleasure;
also
 they should not mistreat
animals
 by creating a hostile living environment for them. These actions, in long
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 will harm mankind
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 because these
animals
 that are being killed for pleasure become extinct which will
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 result in
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 ecosystem that’s dangerous. It is important for
humans
 to note that they cannot exist without deriving benefits from
animals
, and it is
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 responsibility to ensure animal welfare. In conclusion, it is evident that
humans
 cannot exist without deriving benefits from
animals
therefore
 I support the concept of depending on
animals
 for our
benefit
, but as discussed earlier
this
 needs to be carried out without subjecting
animals
 to exploitation.
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