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In some countries, it is thought advisable that children begin formal education at four years old, while in others they do not have to start school until they are seven or eight. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

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People in different parts of the world recommend different ages for when
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 should start formal
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. While some believe it is better not
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 until the
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 is at least seven or eight years old, I side with those who think
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 should start as early as when they are only four. In many countries, people assume that making their
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 start
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 as late as when they are seven or eight can allow these
children
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 to spend more time with their
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 and enjoy their early phase of life in a natural way, where there is little or no input from the outside world. They argue that
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 way,
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 would not have to follow a
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rigid rigid
 schedule and their young and vulnerable minds would not have their creativity taken away.
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, they think that little
children
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 should stay more close to their
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 because it is essential to
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 bond as early as possible. In their
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, they
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 researches that claim that a
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 is more likely to be both creative and close to his
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her
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 if not burdened with
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 early on in his
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her life.
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, I believe, if the right teaching methodologies are followed, a
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 who is put into
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 earlier in life is better at learning new skills quickly without having any impact on the relationship with the
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.
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When
children
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 are put into
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 early in their lives, they are able to experience new activities
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,
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 helps
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 and stimulate their little minds and in return make them more creative. Experiencing new things on regular basis keeps a
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 since he
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she is now habitually looking for something new to try out and work with.
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, an active
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 communicates far more with his
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her parent than a one who leaves his
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her house barely, which in return help the parent-
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 relationship grow
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, a
child
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 who played with clay during school hours would most probably talk about the same thing for the rest of the day and would
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 find out about something similar on his
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her own.
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, putting
children
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 into
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 as early as possible can only help them in many ways and should be encouraged. To conclude, while some people believe it is better to
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children
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 for formal
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 as late as when they are at least seven, I believe, involving them they are younger can be more fruitful.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • formal education
  • advisable
  • structured learning
  • academic skills
  • socialization
  • competitive edge
  • cognitive development
  • language acquisition
  • play-based learning
  • creativity
  • problem-solving skills
  • cognitive abilities
  • reduce stress
  • childhood
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