Advertising discourages people from being different individuals by making us all want to do the same and look the same. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Some
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argue that advertisements make
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lose their individuality by encouraging them to look and think in the same
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. Considering the variety of
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in advertising and consumers' free will, I completely disagree with
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point of view. In the following essay, I will elaborate on it.
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with, the function of advertisements is to display special features to the public and provide a wide range of choices to potential consumers.
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, Uniqlo is one of the most famous clothing brands and its commercials always focus on delivering information about comfort and practicality.
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, Zara, a well-known high street brand, promotes fashionable clothes to those who prefer to dress stylishly. In
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, it's fair to say that advertisement doesn't make
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look the same
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it diversifies their appearance. Whether
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want to be sporty or stylish, choices are out there for them to distinguish themselves from others. Admittedly, advertising with celebrity endorsements influence
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's shopping habit in some extent, companies in the past always tried to maximize their sales of newly released
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by hiring celebrities to run advertising campaigns. Some fanatic fans of these idols would purchase the
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without thinking if these were useful to them. In
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, these
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, by buying the same things, ran the risk of their original identities and becoming less individualistic.
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, it's important to point out nowadays more and more consumers not only pay attention to who appears in commercials
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but are
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be aware of the
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' quality and practicality. As time goes by, the public will develop a clearer
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about whether to trust these advertisements or not and in ,turn they will re-evaluate their own needs or reactions to
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kind of publicity.
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, advertising contributes to shoppers' individuality by providing more choices to satisfy different needs. There can be times when some of them purchase a good because of celebrity charm, but
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will not stop them from considering their true purchasing needs in the long run.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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