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Many students decide to further their study abroad what are the benefits and drawbacks of studying aboard. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Nowadays lots of
students
 are liking to seek higher
education
 from European countries.
Although
 it has many pros and cons, I totally agree that studying in English speaking countries can offer more advantages than demerits.
Firstly
, choosing a host nation for higher
education
 help to learn different cultures and languages.
Moreover
, seeking
education
 from
an
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 European nation will assist the
student
 to improve
the
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fluency in speaking.
In addition
,
this
 may
also
 help the
student
 to be independent and
also
 the
student
 can gain confidence. Apart from the above-mentioned statement,
this
also
offer
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 wider job opportunities in future.
On the contrary
, the
student
 may experience
cultural
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 shock and
language
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barrier
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 in the host country. Due to
this
, the
student
 may feel psychologically depressed and may even fail to concentrate or complete the
education
.
Moreover
, some
students
 will experience homesickness
also
. So it is necessary for the
students
 to prepare mentally before moving to other countries for
long
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 term stay.
Finally
, even though studying abroad has both merits and demerits, the advantages outweigh the
later
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. In my viewpoint seeking
education
 from abroad can offer a bright future to the
students
.
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