Many things that used to be done in the home by hands are now being done by machines. Does this development bring more advantages or disadvantages.

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essential part of everybody life. In
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of time. I believe that
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the advantages of appliances are more
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to drawbacks and I will
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technology
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works so effortlessly and reduces human workload. Perhaps, the predominant reason is that
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the apparatus works accurately and, it is
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.
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produces
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amount of cloth which are low on price, high quality, with swifts delivery in no time. It is only possible because they have
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most advanced machines.
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dependency on
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technology
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some negative development on
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very low. For, example, one year
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I brought a shawl
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price but I could not wear it
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6 months but my grandpa have a shawl which is almost 15 years older but still in good condition. To conclude, the benefits of modern devices are more as well as it is making
people
life so comfortable and enjoyable.
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  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
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  • Efficiency
  • Manual labor
  • Displacement
  • Homemaking skills
  • Technological advancements
  • Self-sufficiency
  • Resource depletion
  • Energy efficiency
  • Social dynamics
  • Operational understanding
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