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Many things that used to be done in the home by hands are now being done by machines. Does this development bring more advantages or disadvantages.

#home #hands #machines #development
In the cutting-edge era, technology has become
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 essential part of everybody life. In
past
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people
 were doing work manually and it is
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 of time. I believe that
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 the advantages of appliances are more
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 to drawbacks and I will
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 notion. Generally speaking, there are some
people
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technology
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 works so effortlessly and reduces human workload. Perhaps, the predominant reason is that
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 the apparatus works accurately and, it is
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 cost and
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.
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, Asian textile in Bangladesh,
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produces
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 amount of cloth which are low on price, high quality, with swifts delivery in no time. It is only possible because they have
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 most advanced machines.
On the other hand
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dependency on
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 technology
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 some negative development on
people
. It is true machinery good are so cheap comparer to handmade but, the durability
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 very low. For, example, one year
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a back
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 I brought a shawl
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low
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 price but I could not wear it
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then
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 6 months but my grandpa have a shawl which is almost 15 years older but still in good condition. To conclude, the benefits of modern devices are more as well as it is making
people
 life so comfortable and enjoyable.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Automation
  • Efficiency
  • Manual labor
  • Displacement
  • Homemaking skills
  • Technological advancements
  • Self-sufficiency
  • Resource depletion
  • Energy efficiency
  • Social dynamics
  • Operational understanding
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