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University education should be free for all students. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#university #education #students
It is certainly claimed that tertiary
education
, which plays an important to produce future human
resource
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 in each
country
, must be provided without any charge. I totally agree with
this
 idea, as I believe that graduates will be
potential
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 to develop countries in the
next
 decade, while some of them are not able to complete a degree due to
the
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financial support. To finish a university degree,
students
 may have to pay
on
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the
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expensive tuition fee which some parents cannot afford.
This
 is the main reason why some
students
 decide to discontinue higher
education
. For
instant
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, the highest rate of children who have drop
class
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classes
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 since high school in Cambodia,
although
 those
students
 had good study records provided that their
family
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families
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 are poor, so they are not able to pay for the schools.
Therefore
, there will be more graduates if the university
education
 is totally free for everyone. Turning to the
country
 benefits, the government is generally needed
next
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 generations who are capable to generate their knowledge to develop the
country
.
Thus
, generate
students
 must be young dynamics to be a part of
country’s
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the country’s
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 development in every sector.
For example
, some
students
 who
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compete
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complete
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 a degree in engineering are
currenting
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currently
 working in developing infrastructures.
This
 represents only the construction field, but there are more sectors
such
 as medical, agricultural, economic
sector
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sectors
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 and so on. Those people will be able to apply their knowledge to develop the
country
 significantly. In conclusion, I
strong
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 believe that the free of charge on higher
education
 certainly provides positive effects on individuals and society.
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