Many people today are worried about cybercrime such as hacking and identity theft. What problems does cybercrime cause and what solution can you suggest for ordinary people and business to take.

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Cybercrime is a serious
problem
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in the modern world and finding a solution to
this
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problem
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is much more complex than just sitting on a chair and browsing on the
internet
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.
This
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problem
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has various aspects, and it involves different factors from political issues to economic ones.
However
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, each citizen should make
their
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contribution to the solution of the
problem
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. It involves being more responsible about the usage of the
internet
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and digital gadgets as well as trying to increase the awareness of the possible problems. Computerized documents provide many opportunities for professionals to do their careers more easily and
efficiency
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.
This
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kind of documentation is
also
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usable for ordinary
people
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in their everyday
activities
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. These
beneficials
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are ranged
form
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transferring secret information between
government
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to storing personal
pictures
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. These
activities
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now are
inseparable
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part of our lives and
human
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may tend to develop
it
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to some extend. Due to the increased number of hackers,
people
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,
however
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, should be more aware of the dangers that may occur
among
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transferring and storing
sensible
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data
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. In
the
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modern society, most transitions are done via
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Internet
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, and online shopping is becoming more common in many countries. So,
people
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usually save
their
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information of their banking account on their laptop or personal computer. Some of them even do not try to choose a strong password for their account and may trust
to
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any message they receive from
unknown
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person, and possibly their important
data
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can be stolen, and they will lose their
money
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.
This
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may cause many difficulties in business trades for both customers and sellers.
Therefore
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, it seems more wisely to choose
more
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reliable
password
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and do not trust
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message or link that usually be sent from unknown senders. Today, modern personal computers provide an opportunity for
people
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to store their personal
pictures
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and other
data
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in
the
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large amount. Sometimes they want to share them
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social networks to be more visible.
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This kind
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of
people
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who are usually youngsters
are
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more vulnerable to
cyber
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thief
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. They are usually targeted to be threatened to pay
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,
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otherwise
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their personal
pictures
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would be spread.
Thus
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, it is more sensible that personal
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would be stored in
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portable hard disks rather than personal computers which are usually connected to the
Internet
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. Cybercrime is not limited to the personal
levels
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. The effect of
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distortion often goes beyond the stolen
money
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or personal
pictures
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. It is often heard that international hackers disturb the function of the very important organization or official
institution
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in different countries. The aim of
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this
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activities
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is different while some of them are seeking a large amount of
money
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,
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just want to make a disruption in the government
activities
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and distort a vital part of these structures. In these cases, authorities should apply more reliable security codes and systems to protect
their
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crucial parts of their country and make
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place
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for their citizens. Overall, actions like providing a good password and using security programs may seem so simple, but they are initial steps to protect
data
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and information
in
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both personal and official levels. When all
people
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in a country be more aware of the possible problems the
less
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difficulties may occur.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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