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Allowing young children to do an enjoyable activity can develop better skills and more creativity than reading. To what extent do you agree? Use reasons and specific examples to explain your answer.

#children #activity #skills #creativity
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Nowadays, it is believed that allowing young
children
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 to enjoy fun
activities
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 would tend to develop many
skills
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.
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, some believe that making small kids love to read books will make them become smarter. In my opinion, I
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 half. I think that students should learn how to read as well as
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enjoy fun
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 of all, allowing kids to play with enjoyable
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 would better make them learn how to make their own decisions. It is said that fun
activities
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 would help
children
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 learn how to plan to
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 opposite side.
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, many schools around the world have a club called chess club to attract students to play along as they can develop their decision-making
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.
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,
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small
children
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also
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 need to learn how to read in order to develop their hard
skills
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. The more they read fluently, the
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more
 they gain new
infomations
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information
 in their life. Many psychologists suggest parents
to
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practice their child on
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reading
skills
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 since they
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three
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yeras
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years
 old. For
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, my mom
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 me to read their books to her as she can point out whether I understand it right or wrong. In conclusion, we will see that play is essential to
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a child's
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 development as it contributes to
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the cognitive
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, physical, social, and emotional well-being of
children
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 and youth.
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