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It is impossible to help all people in the world, so governments should only focus on people in their own countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

#people #world #governments #focus #countries
Bestowing aid to everyone, in
this
 world, is not possible. Owing to
this
, the ministry should solely concentrate on the local citizens. I accord with
this
 assertion up to a higher extent and pertinent notions will be elucidated
further
. Commencing with
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favorable
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 aspects to be agreed. The
first
 tenable
etiology
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 is,the rescue process can be imparted efficiently within the
country
. To elaborate
it
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more, if commoners of their own
country
 suffer either from natural calamity or spreading of any infectious diseases, it would be less effortful to reach out to them and provide required essential things
such
 as food, water, medicines and so on, which is not only arduous but
also
 risky to reach the contaminated zones. During
Covid-19
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 pandemic, to exemplify, every nation’s authority was highly focused to solve the problem of
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corona virus
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 among their own residents so that the number of cases can be lessened fastly.
Furthemore
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Furthermore
, the government should help the poor
people
 of their own
country
. As they suffer from various ailments, lack of education, scarcity of food and shelter, which are quintessential to survive, higher officials should put effort to overcome
this
 issue, by dint of which crime rate will
also
 be reduced in several regions within the
country
;
Therefore
, putting endeavours to overcome the complications of disaster as well as poverty.
On the other hand
, affluent
countries
 should impart assistance to underprivileged nations who are struggling with issues. Succouring other
countries
'
people
 is not a bad action
,
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 if their
people
 are already safe. When developed
countries
 find solutions to a
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worldwide
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world-wide
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 problem, which are arduous to resolve, they can share it with other multitudes of various nations.
For instance
, the USA developed a coronavirus vaccine and distributed it to other
countries
, which was
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 great assistance;
Hence
 it saves the lives of millions of
people
 who were suffering from the virus. In conclusion, albeit it is highly imperative to contribute with supplies of indispensable items to other
countries
, solving the situations of calamity and poverty among the local community is more demanding to save the life of their own citizens.
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