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People think that countries should produce foods that their population eats and import less food as much as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, in the 21st century, international logistics play an important role in the economic development of
countries
 in the whole world. It is argued that the
food
 should be produced for the population
instead
 of being imported. In my opinion, I partly agree with
this
 view but it does not mean I oppose importing
food
. My reasons will be explained in the
next
 paragraph. On the one hand, producing
food
 for the citizens in a nation brings several benefits to the population.
Firstly
, the
food
 planted or fed and used on the spot are usually fresh and nutritious because they are
not
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 added preservatives or other chemicals to keep them looking fresh after the transport process.
Secondly
, the residents there can guarantee
food
 hygiene and safety because they know the originals of that
food
 as well as their farming process.
In addition
, the
foods
’ prices are
also
 much cheaper than the imported
food
 as those prices do not include shipping fees, preservation fees and other supply fees.
On the other hand
,
foods
 from foreign
countries
 are
also
 necessary to be imported because of their advantages.
As a result
 of differences in weather between regions, there are several
foods
 a country can produce that the others can.
For instance
, some tropical fruits can only be grown in
countries
 with hot climates while some other fruits can only be grown in cold climates.
This
 leads to the exchange of goods between
countries
 together. Especially, some
foods
such
 as Korean ginseng, Kobe beef become popular in the lives of inhabitants in a country but those
foods
 cannot grow in climate, soil conditions there. In conclusion,
although
 it is beneficial to consume goods produced for the citizens in a country, I believe that it is better to balance between producing and importing
food
 for the residents.
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