Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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is the key point of the
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.
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, other people think that there are other aspects that contribute equally
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the
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’s
development
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. In my opinion,
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the finical
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status of the
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is very crucial whereas other progress
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as
education
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, political stability and health care
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equally important as well. On the one hand, the
development
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of the nation is being measured by economic growth which
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many pay more attention
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that issue rather than other factors. By developing
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economic progress of the
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, it can create more job opportunities and a business venture for citizens so that they can collect higher tax as income per capita will increase.
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,
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fund can provide
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needs of their people
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infrastructure, health care,
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, finical aid, etc. In
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, the developed
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with better finical progress
provide
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greater health care facilities during pandemic outbreaks while poor
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struggling to fight for it.
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, the wealthy nation gets fully vaccinated for covid-19 by the arrangement of their
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.
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, most people suggest investing
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one factor will not achieve
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target that their
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aim
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for.
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To be more precise, governments need to balance each and every sector, especially in the political stability and
education
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sector. Foreign investors will withdraw their investment which can seriously lead to
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of
the
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apply
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economic growth. In Myanmar, the typical example of being
victim
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a victim
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of
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political unrest, GDP significantly dropped and
inflation
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the inflation
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rate rocketed about 13% within a few months after
military
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a military
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coup.
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, it is difficult to improve the
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’s
development
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unless
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supports
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the
education
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system and should pay attention
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this
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. Changes can’t be seen overnight whereas educated and skilled workers
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are needed
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for every category for building
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country’s
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the country’s
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foundation. In conclusion,
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government
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the government
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should take into
accounts
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for
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other aspects while focusing on the
economic
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economy
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. In my view, there
is
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nothing less or more important factors to improve the
country
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development
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • standard of living
  • sustainable development
  • social equality
  • environmental degradation
  • cultural heritage
  • technological innovation
  • wealth disparity
  • human development index
  • holistic approach
  • quality of life
  • economic prosperity
  • healthcare system
  • education system
  • cultural diversity
  • policy decisions
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