Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

While
a number of people are inclined to believe commercials are incredibly important for convincing us to buy things, others disagree with it
due to
they believe those are so common that cannot attract us anymore. I must say, I strongly disagree with the idea that people are not interested in advertisements anymore. It has an important role when humans are deciding what to buy. First of all, from my point of view, people only believe what they see and they would like to be convinced before owning something. They love the feeling of being satisfied after a good investment or buying anything.
This
is why, commercials have a significant impact on us in order to make us satisfied with our shopping because most of the time, we influence products' videos and
this
pushes us to have
one
.
For instance
, once, I saw a hairdryer video and wanted to get
one
although
I did not need
one
.
Furthermore
, sometimes, we are not able to choose
one
product because we cannot decide between brands and in
this
situation, advertisements help us to decide. Eventually, we watch all the products' videos and choose
one
of them. It is probably the
one
which is best advertised, not the
one
with the best quality.
In addition
, commercials make companies prominent.
For instance
, my brother is
such
a capitalist that he always wants to buy anything well-known without looking at their features.
Thus
we can see it definitely works
while
persuading us.
To sum up
, what I mean
is
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I completely believe advertisements are successful at persuading and making famous products
thus
they can attract more and more customers.
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task achievement
Ensure that both views presented in the question are discussed equally and that your own opinion is clear throughout the essay, not only at the conclusion.
coherence cohesion
Make use of a wider range of cohesive devices and paragraphing to enhance logical flow.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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