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Luck is the most crucial in one's success. Do you agree?

#luck #success
Many
people
 believe
luck
 plays an essential role in each person's path to
success
. In
this
 essay, I will discuss and determine why I cannot entirely agree with
this
 view. The compelling reason shows that the
success
 for each person depends on their determination and hard
work
 in the process of working, thereby creating excellent results. Many
people
 think their
success
 is precisely due to
luck
, but that
luck
 only comes when they know how to
work
 hard to achieve the goals they set themselves.
For instance
, Walt Disney, who has confronted many failures, was rejected about 302 times when he asked for the cost of building a company, but after hard
work
 and determination, he became the founder of a famous animation studio in the world.
As a result
, humans should set their own goals and roadmap to pursue them constantly and not depend on fortune. Another reason that can alter the minds of
people
 who believe in
luck
 is that, in reality, uncertainty still exists, but it only gives
people
 short-term achievements. It is challenging to follow
people
 throughout their life.
For example
, giveaways or lottery games routinely will not require players to perform anything complicated other than waiting for the results to be drawn. It makes sense that most players will believe in a fortune. Since they obtain the desired result like money, they will squander it for a few weeks. In conclusion, I believe that
luck
 is only one per cent determining factor on the way to each individual's
success
, and the remaining 99 per cent will include effort, hard
work
 and inquisitiveness in
people
 themselves.
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