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You cannot go to a company where you got an offer. Write a letter to the HR supervisor to explain the reason why you decline the offer express you gratitude explain you like your current job very much

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter to express my gratitude towards your
company
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 for offering me a
job
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 which I cannot accept at the moment. I am the candidate to whom your
company
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 has offered the
job
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 of a staff nurse;
however
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, I cannot accept
this
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 offer.
Although
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 I applied for a
job
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 in your
company
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 two months ago, I joined as a nursing coordinator at Fortis Hospital, Chandigarh
last
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 month. It has been a month that I have been working there, now I do not want to leave that
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 in a short period. I appreciate that your
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 offers me a
job
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 with good wages.
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,
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company
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 is known for its conducive work environment and co-operative staff members; thereby, most of the people prefer to join your
company
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. Despite looking forward to working with your
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 in future, I like my current
job
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 which offers me not only to hone my practical skills in the nursing field but
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 to provide flexible working hours.
Moreover
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, my
job
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 includes free medical services and checkups for my family including me.
That is
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 why, I like my
job
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. I thank you for your valuable time. Yours faithfully, Amandeep Kaur
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coherence cohesion
While the letter is well-structured and logically organized, consider adding a brief conclusion to reinforce your main points and leave a lasting impression.
task achievement
Your reason for declining the offer and your appreciation for the job offer are clear. However, consider being a bit more specific about why you enjoy your current job, perhaps with examples.
suitable writing tone
The letter uses a polite and respectful tone, suitable for professional correspondence.
logical structure
The structure is clear, with separate paragraphs for each main idea, which enhances readability.
greeting and closing
The greeting and closing are appropriate for a formal letter.
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