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telecommuting is becoming the way of the future. Discuss the pros and cons of this tendency.

#future #tendency
Contemporary, The earth becoming smaller day by day, and our future will depend only on telecommuting. It has pros like connect anywhere in the world.
However
, it has cons like people becoming lazy. The advantages and disadvantages will be discussed in detail in the below paragraphs.
To begin
 with, telecommuting has many types like calling facility, Internet facility for chatting, surfing and video calls and so on. People can talk with their family if they are anywhere on the earth.
For example
, I’m in Germany right now, and my family lives in India to talk with them by video call daily.
Moreover
, due to pandemics, online study is possible only by telecommuting. In contradiction, the public doesn’t like to be physically fit, becoming addicted to it. Due to COVID-19, all things are online-only like study, meetings, works and so on.
For instance
, I have habited online classes so, after classes, only I prefer to sleep, so I can’t maintain my physical health.
Furthermore
, the world becoming smaller, but society is going far away from relationships. Nowadays, people less prefer to meet physically
instead
 of they are meeting online more. The public has no option. Society must have to accept
this
 tendency because it’s helpful to make our life easy. The coin has two sides, so it has
also
 been disadvantaged. The public can control to use and use in the right direction
instead
 of misusing it. I think it’s worth it.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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