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University students are increasingly studying abroad as part of their studies. Do the advantages of studying abroad outweigh the disadvantages.

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Nowadays, the majority of graduate and post-graduate
students
 prefer studying at overseas high ranked universities. While it is a tough activity and has got several drawbacks, I believe that
it
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 benefits are far more.
This
 essay will highlight
positive
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the positive
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 and negative points of studying abroad. On the one hand, taking courses at foreign academic
institudes
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institutes
 is highly beneficial for both government and
students
.
First
, young adults
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 foreign countries have faced many valuable experiences, importantly they learn how to handle their own life without their parents.
For instance
, student's life in other countries would be expensive so they have to learn how to manage their money, some of them find part-time jobs.
Second
,
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 fee of international
students
 is fare more than local,
thus
 it is beneficial for economic development.
Last
 year British Columbia accepted more
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that
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 25000 international
students
 from around the world,
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this
country
 will become more and more developed in the
next
 decade.
On the other hand
, it is
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 believed that, if the rate of immigration of pupils in a
country
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, it is more likely that in near future that society will face
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 of professional careers and it will put some negative effects on all parts of that
country
. On the other side,
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 large number of
students
 feel depressed when they are far from their own homes. It seems to me that if
a youngsters
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 decided to leave their hometown and
country
 for educational purposes, they would miss their family and friends but they might buy other
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 like freedom, studying at reputable universities. To conclude,
although
 studying at abroad colleges have significant advantages, it has their own disadvantages. It seems to me that the positive effects outweigh
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the negative
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 ones.
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