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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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 lesson that can be learnt by children is through their home, but some people are in favour that it should be in school. Which is the best place for kids to learn? In
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 essay, I will discuss why it is debatable for the public where good values and manners are taught.
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 with, parents are the
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 person who can teach their children. Since they are born, they are responsible for how they talk, laugh, walk, eat, run and many more. Their offspring copies what the old people show, they are the role model at home, so anything that their parents are doing their children intends to do the same. There is a saying that the attitude of the child is a reflection of the parent's.
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, many think it is an obligation for them to practice their babies to be good.
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,the other believes that school is the right place for learning, either subjects or traits. We send them to have a proper education which includes manners and right conduct since they are
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 spending most of the time in the institute. Nowadays, many facilities are already offering for the young ones to train them at an early age since it is common that they both working. I conclude, being a good citizen, we should know what is the difference between right and wrong, in proper
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 we can be an example to anyone. Social media is one example that can influence people no matter what age it is, but if we are lived in a society that follows the rule,
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 we can adapt to what we can see in our surroundings.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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