You recently organized an all-day meeting for your company, which took place in a local hotel. In their feedback, participants at the meeting said they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food served for lunch. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter •Say what the participant liked about the hotel. •Explain why they were unhappy about the hotel. •Suggest what the manager should do to improve the food in the future.
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Dear sir,
My company had an all-day meeting at your
hotel
yesterday and our experience was not completely exciting. While
we had a great time enjoying the ambiance
of your conference room, my colleagues' reviews regarding your food were not positive.
Actually, the location of your Change the spelling
ambience
hotel
was perfect for a meeting which everyone enjoyed. Also
, your staff had great composure and they welcomed us all warmly. Moreover
, the interior of the meeting room looks luxurious which makes it fantastic for taking team pictures.
Although
other things were perfect, however
, the meals were terrible. Firstly
, orders took too long before they served leaving people to be starved. Also
, they didn't taste great, hence
, many of us were not able to finish our food. Lastly
, they were too spicy.
As a solution, and because we love your hotel
, I would advise your kitchen staff and chefs could be retrained and take these complaints to modify their recipes when cooking. Otherwise
, we might not use your hotel
for our subsequent meetings.
Thanks for your understanding.
Yours faithfully,
Moses.Submitted by peteromisakin on
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coherence
To enhance coherence, ensure a smoother transition between the positive feedback about the hotel and the negative feedback about the food. You could add a transitional sentence to link these sections more seamlessly.
cohesion
Improve cohesion by providing clearer topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph to guide the reader through your points more effectively.
suitable writing tone
The letter maintains a polite and professional tone throughout, which is very suitable for a business communication.
complete response
You clearly addressed all parts of the task by mentioning the positive aspects of the hotel, explaining why the participants were unhappy about the food, and suggesting ways to improve.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite