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some people think that genetically modified(GM) crops are a positive development .Others, however, argue that they are potentially dangerous. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, using GM products have been a controversial issue .some
people
 claim that modified genetic
food
 brings many advantages. while others
people
 in oppose that product
such
food
 are harmful.To me, the latter is near my think.
This
 essay will deal with both views. some group of
people
 that enthusiastic
food
 industry ,considered it as the best way to tackle lack of
food
 ,as result of increasing population .because
this
 product not only can be provided in vast amount but is
also
 can be preserved and make be healthier by some measure. utilizing some vitamins and remove problem genes make them safe.
For example
, peanuts.fruit and vegetables can be store for a much more long time.
Therefore
 in kind of situation even in the
,
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winter there will be adequate
food
.
on the other hand
, activists of protecting
food
 are of opinion that there is no solitary piece of evidence that proved are safe for
people
. They argue that there is a definite link between eating technological
food
 and some disease in long term
such
 as cancer.
Moreover
 , engineering
food
 has a bad effect on the environment and some plants. because due to GMF much dangerous materials must be used.For instant, banana, in order, to ripen bananas it is used some gas. overall, I am of opinion that
although
 it seems individual has the benefit of genetically modified
food
 to survive.in
this
 case of
food
 due to some disadvantages it needs more research.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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