Nowadays technology is increasingly being used to monitor what people are saying and doing (for example, through cell phone tracking and security cameras). In many cases, the people being monitored are unaware that this is happening. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

In the modern world, due to the advancement of

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technology

, we are always monitors. While some people think that

this

monitoring

system

brings some drawbacks, from my point of view,

this

technology

offers both positive and negative effects. On the one hand,

this

technology

brings endless benefits to our daily life. Out of

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is that it strengths our security

system

. To illustrate, unlike a few

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ago, we can refer the CCTV footage to catch a criminal or investigate a crime.

Thus

we can speed up the

inventigation

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investigation

process and

also

make the trial more efficient.

Similarly

, we can get immediate notification if someone is in danger.

On the other hand

, one of the obvious drawbacks of

this

monitering

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monitoring

is that it

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on our personal freedom.

This

is because our movement is tracked, some of us may feel uneasy and insecure.

For example

,when we are shopping, the camera, installed by the shop owner is recording every

our

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movement. We sometimes feel uncomfortable as we do not know what they will do with the recording.

As a result

of all these nowadays, some people do not enjoy their leisure time in

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public places as they used to do in the past. In conclusion, it is true to say that

this

technology

makes our day-to-day life more secure and boots

efficientcy

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efficiency

in security

system

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, but it should be noted that not all of the outcomes of

this

system

have been positive.

As a result

, we should be careful in using them to minimize its

repurcussion

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