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Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people consider that throughout
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 journey, from lower to higher levels,
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 are emphasised more as compared to developing practical skills.
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, I am of the opinion that having strong theoretical knowledge has
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great significance in a variety of ways. One of the
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 to focus on learning
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 is that background knowledge needs to be stronger. Without knowing
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 whole-heartedly, students can never learn the appropriate practical implications of a subject. To illustrate
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, for doctors anatomy is considered to be a
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 subject but in order to be a great surgeon, one must master even the tiniest details of
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 he/she would end up being a disaster for
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society. Another reason that favours
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 idea is that primary schools specifically ought to teach theory because of its immense significance in
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 of career, later in adulthood,
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 mathematics and philosophy are thought to be comprised of
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 and figures, while in reality, they provide the
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 base for engineering and dramatics respectively.
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, by observing one's ability to grasp these concepts and personal choices, teachers and family members can do career counselling of youngsters
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. In conclusion,
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 some people give more value to
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 knowledge, I am of the opinion that focusing the
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 in educational institutions is the key to a successful future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rote memorization
  • practical skills
  • adaptable skills
  • critical thinking
  • balanced approach
  • problem-solving
  • decision-making
  • workforce readiness
  • real-life challenges
  • technological advancements
  • information management
  • creativity hindrance
  • lifelong learning
  • skill development
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