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some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. others believe that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. discuss both the views and give your oiupnion.

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The public
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 department is an important one in the
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 sector of any nation. They manage the general wellbeing of the state by taking statistics of
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 cases and early control of diseases.
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 exercises are good for our minds and bodies, I think it is not enough. Public
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also
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 works on disease outbreaks and many other sicknesses that sport can not help. While some believe that more
sports
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 facilities can help, others think more is needed and I agree with the
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 opinion. On one hand, investing in sporting facilities will ensure healthier people.
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, a healthy body has a strong immunity to fight when there is a sudden disease outbreak like COVID. WHO said those with underlining chronic
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 issues are more likely to lose their lives to it.
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, if the majority is sporty and healthy most underlining modifiable causes of diseases will be out of the way. As
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 there are fewer diseases to worry about. To
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 end,
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 can be of more advantage than expected.
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, more things need to be in place to really manage
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.
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, cholera is very deadly and no amount of
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 activities can help. Good hygiene and identification of the source of infection are really needed to reduce its spread.
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, hereditary and autoimmune sicknesses are suppressed by avoiding triggers. As
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, it is difficult to capitalise on one thing in public
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 more hands needs to be on deck. To conclude, having discussed both ends. I disagree that exercises are enough because public
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 covers a wider range of areas and illnesses that only
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 can not erase.
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, more is required to improve the wellness of the. society.

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