In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge.

For many years from now, in some societies
parents
teach their offspring to make an effort in everything so they can accomplish great
things
in the future. While
this
form of education is useful in many cases, there are some other situations in which tutors can create a wrong mindset on
children
, and, if the message is not well delivered, could create an opposite outcome. In
this
essay, we will discuss some of the advantages and disadvantages that
this
tradition has on
children
.
First
and foremost, no one can deny that
parents
who teach their
children
to work hard are not telling them
this
so the kids grow up traumatized or with misconceptions about a disciplined lifestyle.
On the contrary
, adults normally tell
this
to infants in order to teach them that, in order to accomplish their dreams and goals, they must have a resilient mindset, overcome difficulties, and always give more of themselves.
For instance
, drawing from my personal experience, when I was learning to ride a bike I failed plenty of times, often hurting myself until the point that I almost gave up. My mother, observing my true desire of joining the other
children
on their bikes, boosted me with a quote that I will never forget "Never give up, no matter how hard it gets". Perhaps because I was really young or because it really hit me, I kept practising and one day I was the fastest of all of my friends. There is nothing wrong with telling others to try harder in order to accomplish what they want, notwithstanding, we must never forget that all of us have our limitations. The disadvantages of
this
educational perspective are often overlooked because they are not common in modern western societies. Let's consider now a situation in which a kid wants to learn how to play a musical instrument but their
parents
tell them that until he does not get straight A's on mathematics, they will not let them learn any type of music. While it is a common and, sometimes, useful way of pedagogy, the intense and unnecessary pressure applied on that kid will traumatize him and, in some cases, will have the opposite result.
Children
learn more of what they observe and experience
instead
of what they hear. If we teach the young to work smarter and not harder and to find a balance between what they like to do and what they must do, the results on their behaviour will be outstanding. All
things
considered, there is almost an impossible mission to tell
parents
how to educate their
children
, especially if they are following a family tradition. Working hard to get what you want has been on humanity for many years and will not disappear easily. Even though it should not cease of existence, the best way of improving our
children
's future success is to combine working hard with working smart. In
this
manner, they will learn to find a balance between doing the
things
that they must do even if they are not pleasant, like doing math homework, and doing
things
they enjoy, like riding bikes with friends or playing a musical instrument.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • achieve
  • try hard
  • positive mindset
  • self-belief
  • motivates
  • ambitious goals
  • resilience
  • determination
  • confidence
  • self-esteem
  • growth mindset
  • unrealistic expectations
  • disappointment
  • failure
  • effort
  • hard work
  • seek support
  • individual differences
  • abilities
  • capabilities
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