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Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museums outweigh the disadvantages?

#museums #charge #admission #people
Nowadays
museums
 are one of the significant places of education except for schools or universities. The variety of
museums
 provide different knowledge that can not be seen at school. Some gallery that works with states is available for students without any
charge
 while others have admission fees. Personally, I believe that all
museums
 should be free, at least for students. On the one hand, many
museums
charge
 people who visit their place due to the fact that it costs a lot of money to set the exhibition or rent a place. The admission fees will be used to develop the equipment and improve the facilities for visitors. The majority of charged
museums
 do not work with the government
then
 the owner has to carry all the expenses.
Therefore
,
this
 is the reason why the entrance fee must be included.
On the other hand
, the
charge
 for entry to
museums
 is not fair for the population in countries. The
museums
 are included in educational places that benefit the population in society.
Therefore
, it should be available for everyone, especially for students and kids. The government should focus more on adolescents and support all of the
museums
 with taxes from citizens.
Moreover
, if
museums
 are available for everyone, it will definitely improve the qualities of nations. To sum up, I completely disagree with charging museum visitors. Some
museums
 have to
charge
 visitors because it causes a lot of expenses but it would be better with the support from the government to reduce or cancel the admission fees.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Admission fee
  • Revenue stream
  • Maintenance
  • Overcrowding
  • Commercialization
  • Cultural heritage
  • Diverse attendance
  • Community ownership
  • Access to culture
  • Visitor experience
  • Exhibit quality
  • Cultural mission
  • Reliance on funding
  • Government subsidies
  • Cultural accessibility
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