You recently returned from oversea by air and left a valuable item on the plane. Write a letter to the airline manager. In your letter .Describe the item you left behind .Say why it is important to you .Explain what you would like the airline manager to do Write at least 150 words.

Dear Sir, I hope
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letter finds you in the best of spirits and radiant health. I am writing
this
letter to let you know that I boarded one of your flights MHZ56
last
week from Tokyo to Delhi and I accidently left my Pizo Micro-motor
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when I landed at Delhi Airport. I am an Oral Surgeon and went to Tokyo for a Dental Conference as a guest speaker. I perform oral surgeries on
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basis and the equipment I left is used frequently to do bone cuttings and bone graft placements during procedures.
Moreover
, it is a
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expensive machine, which I got after many efforts, because of its superior quality and accuracy. I have been using it for eight years and it helped me a lot to enhance my
efficency
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efficiency
. I hope you will understand my situation. I would urge you to kindly find my valuable item and courier it to me. I am ready to pay for the courier cost as well. I hope you will look into the matter personally and I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Jatinder.
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coherence cohesion
Consider breaking the letter into clearer paragraphs to better separate the description of the item, its importance, and the requested action.
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Add a little more detail about how you discovered the item was missing and emphasize why it is irreplaceable.
coherence cohesion
The letter has a good balance of courteous language used in the greeting and closing.
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The letter maintains a suitable formal tone throughout, appropriate for writing to an airline manager.
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The importance of the item is clearly communicated, making the need for its return understandable.
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