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In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development? You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

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Earlier
students
 did their higher education in their country, but now due to
the
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globalization,
students
 have a lot of opportunities to go to foreign countries. Certainly,
This
 development offers both benefits and drawbacks which will be outlined in the following paragraphs before the conclusion is reached. On the one hand, One of the advantages of studying abroad is that
students
 get a chance to interact with different kinds of
people
 and learn about new cultures and languages. On top of that,
students
 studying abroad
also
 have the opportunity to form friendships with
people
 of various nationalities, these may develop into useful professional networks.
Moreover
, living far from family and friends can enable young
people
 to become more independent and self-sufficient.
On the other hand
, the experience of studying in a different country is not always a positive one. Some of the young
people
 sometimes struggle to adapt to their new environment and suffer from severe culture shock.
This
 situation can become worse if the student is not mature enough to cope by themselves. Different approaches to learning and teachings may
also
 come as an unwelcome surprise to some
students
.
Furthermore
, another negative of studying outside their country is that
students
 have to pay a higher fee for their studies. They often work part-time to fund their studies and
this
also
 takes their focus away from their studies. In conclusion, even though studying abroad offer many disadvantages, having an experience at a foreign university can
also
 bring many advantages to
students
' life
such
 as high employment prospect and excellent opportunity to learn new things.
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