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Some believe that people who do physical work should be paid on par with the people who have high level degree. Do you agree or disagree ?

#believe #people #work #par #level
In some
cases
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 people claimed that
person
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a person
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 with physical
work
 deserves
equal
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an equal
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 salary as
one
 who on
higher
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a higher
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 position. Personally, I think that human being spends more energy in physical occupation
then
 who
work
 mentally.
Nonetheless
, there is exist doubts about
educational
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the educational
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 competence of the country as
whole
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a whole
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 if everybody
prefer
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prefers
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work
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to work
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 physically. From
one
 side I take issue with the people who
supports
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 that kind of idea. To prove, if a
person
consider
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 no need of
studing
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studying
 due to
one
 can get the same amount without mental
work
,
then
 it will bring disaster to the country as it will not be new discloses in
various
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the various
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 sphere, causes less cultured people and decreased
educatinal
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educational
standarts
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standards
.
For example
, students can close their eyes to school subjects because they know that even without education, money will be in their pockets.
Consequently
, no need for higher
standarts
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standards
 and motivation.
However
, If they know that with good mental
work
 they are able to sit and
recieve
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receive
high
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a high
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 salary
then
 it might cause
as
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 motivational punch. From the
second
 point of view,
one
 just can get bad luck in their life and life make somebody ought to have
work
 physical job. That demands total inclusion of
person
 to
job
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the job
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.
For instance
,
Person
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People
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 who
tired
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are tired
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 physically do not have
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opportunity
opporunity
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the opporunity
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 to recover till the end of
day
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the day
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, only sleep can help them.
In contrast
,
person
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the person
a person
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 who
tired
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is tired
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 mentally is able to recover with the means of physical education and gather
strengh
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strength
 to other
deal
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deals
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likewise
 family or entertaining. Taking everything into consideration, both opinions have a chance to exist. The best place is where the
person
are
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is
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 not.
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