More and more people are suffering from health problems caused by a modern lifestyle which cannot be treated with modern medicines. Some people think that a return to traditional medicine should be encouraged. To what extent do you agree?

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There is a very true proverb which states that If
health
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is lost, Everything is lost. One of the major
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that our generation is facing is
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issues due to the lifestyle we live. Some
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says
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that the solution to it can be
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the return
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of Traditional medicine. I partially agree with
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statement and
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now will be discussing the reasons. We are living in the generation of technology.
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do not need to work hard for anything as we have availability of everything. The type of lifestyle we all are living is affecting our
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.
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, we have
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for everybody
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. But as it said excess of everything is very injurious and so taking extra medicine is infecting our liver,kidneys.
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,lots of
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get addicted to
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which affect their
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few days before I was not able to sleep properly so a friend consult me to take sleeping tablets but I got into
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the addiction
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it which caused me other
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issues.
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Traditional
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have no side effects. They increased immunity of the body that was the reason
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older
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used to live
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life. But the traditional
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not having
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a solution
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solution
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for all the diseases. In the
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very less
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used to get ill and
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medicine were
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less.Let us understand it with an example, Corona has globally infected
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and had made human life miserable.So, to ,eradicate
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issue
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institutes and
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have created a vaccine for the benefit
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all
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. So, we cannot use traditional
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to fight these
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of illnesses. To conclude, It is true today's generation need modern
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because we can hear new diseases coming like corona but it too
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some disadvantages as
people
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get addicted to these and so it
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our body.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • chronic conditions
  • holistic approach
  • preventive care
  • natural remedies
  • cultural heritage
  • ancestral knowledge
  • integration
  • complementary healthcare
  • regulation
  • standardization
  • scientific validation
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