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Most of the urgent problems can only be solved with international cooperation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The solutions to the majority of emergency situations can only be provided by international aid. In my opinion, international help is very crucial in dealing with most of the
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 issues.
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, nowadays financial instability is at its peak. To meet the demands of life, the concept of international cooperation has gained more importance.
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 has become the immense need of the time,
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, via
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 and export of goods, various
countries
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 try to fulfil each other's needs.
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 help is of more significance in the developed and underdeveloped
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, where, there is a situation of feminine and starvation,
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 survival is becoming impossible for the local population.
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, a lot of organizations are working hard on the international level in order to maintain peace throughout the world. Some of the
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 are currently in huge conflicts. To illustrate
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, to resolve
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 major issues, these must be addressed on the international forums to get a more suitable solution,
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 avoiding the risk of wars.
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, when a sudden unforeseen incident happens somewhere and people end up being helpless, international help must be made available as soon as possible. To illustrate it
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, the earth quacks, storms
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hurricanes etc strike the people and finances of a country harshly,
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 for the sake of these people's rehabilitation, international help becomes vital. In conclusion, I consider that some of the
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 being stable are able to fulfil their public's needs,
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, most of the
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 are facing a lot of challenges these days.
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, to deal with
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 crisis, international cooperation is of great significance and its urgent availability must be ensured by the international organisations to maintain harmony and peace throughout the globe.

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