Many people nowadays don't feel safe either when they are at home or go out. What are the reasons? What can we do to solve this problem?

Safety has become more concerned than ever before no matter
people
are staying home or travelling around.
This
negative feeling could be resulted from
media
or from real dangers in relation to our vulnerability in
this
time of technology and online connectedness. For each reason, the solutions differ.
Crime
has always existed along with the history of
human
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but the tendency of
media
nowadays makes us feel that
crime
is getting more severe. In fact, bad
news
and
crime
are covered heavily
on
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newspapers, TV and online
news
because
this
kind of content often attracts more attention from
audience
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the audience
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. The more views reporters get, the more advertisements they can sell to companies. The frequency of bad
news
on
media
could not only mislead
people
about the chance of
crime
in their
neighborhood
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but
also
affect
viewers’mind
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viewers mind
unconsciously. To solve
this
problem, citizens should be educated to be critical when reading or seeing
news
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. They should have other reliable sources of
information
,
such
as local police offices
,
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so that they can be informed properly about the security and threats in their area.
Besides
,
people
should equip themselves with measures of
defense
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,
such
as learning a kind of martial art, staying with a group rather than going alone, and being cautious when in contact with a stranger. The
second
reason why
people
feel insecure is we are becoming more vulnerable due to the
information
we share via the Internet. Most adults nowadays spend many hours online for work, entertainment and shopping. By using social networking websites, we upload and share a lot of personal
information
,
for example
, our home, places we go and members of our family. Even when we do not actively share these kinds of
information
, every act we do on the Internet is recorded and made use
.
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In the worst scenario, hackers could take advantage of leaks and use our identity to cheat
people
in subtle ways. To handle
this
issue,
information
security and user protection should be paid more attention
by
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experts and governments. Similar to physical dangers and threats, Internet users themselves should be aware of risks when being online and have their own measures. In conclusion, the fear of
people
nowadays might be real or due to the effect of
media
. No matter
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reason is, self-awareness and
self-defense
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are the most important.
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