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Society is based on rules and laws. If individuals were free to do whatever they want to do, it could not function. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the above statement?

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It is undeniable that
laws
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 are enacted to maintain order, deliver justice, and ensure the safety and security of
society
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's citizens. I absolutely agree with the idea that allowing
people
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 in any community to do anything they want will result in utter chaos and uncertainty, eventually leading to civilization's demise. In
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To begin
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laws
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 are created to ensure that humans function in a consistent manner. Without a doubt, everyone has the right to freedom. A civilised
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,
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, can only exist if
people
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 respect
one
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 another's rights, lives, and possessions. Only if they are given a set of rules or directives to obey can
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 be accomplished. Any civilization is said to fail if it lacks these rules or
regulations
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. To make matters worse, it is human tendency to follow
one
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's own interests. There will be far too many
people
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 who will slip into harmful habits and vices if they are given complete freedom to do anything they want. We will never have a civil
society
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 if the majority of
people
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 disregard other
people
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's life, rights, and property.
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 to the aforementioned concerns,
regulations
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 are enacted to ensure that individuals are safe in their homes, workplaces, and while out socialising with family and friends. Corporate
law
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, criminal
law
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, civil
law
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, constitutional
law
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, and so on are examples of distinct sorts of
laws
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. All of these
regulations
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 and
laws
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 contribute to a sense of safety and security in
society
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 as a whole, while
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 deterring individuals who have an inclination to injure others or perpetrate frauds of any kind.
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, if there were no traffic
laws
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, there would be a large number of
people
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 killed or injured in car accidents, as well as too much disorder and confusion on the roads.
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, no
one
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 will be terrified of speeding or running a red light. The
law
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, of course, cannot be absolute and must be updated to reflect changing global and cultural demands and ideals.
A legislation
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 enacted fifty years ago may not be applicable in today's complex and global
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. Women,
for example
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, did not have the right to vote in many countries until the
first
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 half of the twentieth century. We cannot even consider
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regulations
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 in today's reality.
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, rules are in place to protect
people
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 from being judged on the basis of their gender, occupation, religion, or race. They exist to help
people
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 understand their moral and social obligations, as well as to respect the rights and freedoms of others. To sum up, the
law
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 is necessary in any
society
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 to preserve order, protect
safety
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, and teach
people
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 to respect
one
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 another.
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, without the rule of
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, wrongdoers will go unpunished, resulting in increased disorder and crime in any
society
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social order
  • harmonious
  • individual freedoms
  • societal norms
  • unrestricted freedom
  • crime rates
  • dysfunctional
  • fair distribution
  • human rights
  • justice system
  • accountability
  • enforcing laws
  • restrictive regulations
  • societal functionality
  • legal frameworks
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