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The graph above illustrates the amount of consumption of margarine, low fat and reduced spreads, butter in 6 years from 1981 to 2007.
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 are measured in
grams
. Overall, it can be seen that the use of all three spreads
were
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 declined
throught
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through
throughout
 the years. While there was
a
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significant growth in low fat and reduced spreads, there was a huge fall
of
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 butter in these 5 years. It is evident that low fat and reduced spreads were growing from around 0
grams
 when they reached
its
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 peak slightly above 80
grams
 (in 1996 to 2001
respectivley
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respectively
).
Then
 they
droped
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dropped
 to just below 80
grams
 in 2007.
On the other hand
, the graph shows that butter increased from
raghly
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roughly
 140
grams
 in 1981 to close to 160
grams
 in 1986, but fall up to between 60 and 40
grams
 in 2007.
Therefore
, margarine fluctuate from just above 80
grams
 to 80
grams
 in 2001
then
 it rapidly
droped
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dropped
 to 40
grams
 in 2007.
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