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The graph above illustrates the amount of consumption of margarine, low fat and reduced spreads, butter in 6 years from 1981 to 2007.
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 are measured in
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. Overall, it can be seen that the use of all three spreads
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 declined
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through
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 the years. While there was
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significant growth in low fat and reduced spreads, there was a huge fall
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 butter in these 5 years. It is evident that low fat and reduced spreads were growing from around 0
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 when they reached
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 peak slightly above 80
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 (in 1996 to 2001
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respectively
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 they
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dropped
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 in 2007.
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, the graph shows that butter increased from
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roughly
 140
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 in 1981 to close to 160
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 in 1986, but fall up to between 60 and 40
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 in 2007.
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, margarine fluctuate from just above 80
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 to 80
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 in 2001
then
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 it rapidly
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dropped
 to 40
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 in 2007.
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