Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or this agree with this statement?

Nowadays, federal authorities of every country have to carefully decide how to arrange budgets in any different transportation. Some individuals believe that it is better for policymakers to spend more amount of money on improving
railways
than roads. Analyzing the benefits of
nation's
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population in terms of saving energy and time along with promoting the economic system can be proven in
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essay. 
Firstly
, subways development provides more advantages for all classes of people in the country while roads investing can only make profits for someone travelling by car. Due to the high price of the car, it is impossible for the poor or even the
middle class
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family to afford their own car.
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is why
of
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improving railway are suitable for everyone in the country.
In other words
, the more development of public transportation
such
as underground transportation,the more convenience for all
travelers
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in
this
city.
For example
, the construction of
high speed
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train system in Japan help Japanese people travel more comfortable.
Besides
, using tubes for travelling reduce energy consumption and carbon dioxide emissions in our environment.
This
encourages passengers who have
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destination
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to go together in the same vehicle.
In addition
, when those who have authority choose to divide more budgets on
railways
,
this
means that there will be more opportunities for offering several jobs.
Government
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have to offer abundant occupations in order to support the underground investment
such
as station master and engineer.
This
can indirectly solve the unemployed problems and recovery the economic situation.
For instance
, in the northern part of Thailand, when the
railways
are developed, vendors can easily sell their local products to
the
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travelers
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.
Then
, it will be a leap forward
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economy
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the economy
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. Having considered
this
matter carefully, I personally agree that federal authorities should spend more money on
railways
than roads
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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