Many famous sport players advertise sport products. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantage?

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Currently, there are some disputes about advertisement. Numerous beloved sportsmen and
sportwomen
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sportswomen
sport women
advertise
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sport
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products
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. In
this
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essay, I will
dicuss
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discuss
some pros and cons
in
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of
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such
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activities and explain that advantages surpass the disadvantages. On the one hand, in some way, it is really
benefits
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for companies which provide particular
products
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,
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sport
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players and customers.
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, sportsmen who are in the mainstream, make money by advertising specific things.
For instance
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,
Ronaldu
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Ronaldo
who is a famous footballer promote the
sport
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brend
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brand
Nike. He receives
approximetely
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approximately
2 billion dollars by participating in
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the twenty-second
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second
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video
clip
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.
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, companies who offer beloved
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sport
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celebrities to advertise their
brend
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brand
have more
sells
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sales
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whih
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which
make them successful and vital in
business
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the business
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industry.
Icluding
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big celebrities
attract
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more customers to buy their product.
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, fans of
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super stars
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enjoy
to lead
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to them. They want to imitate and follow the style of their
sport
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idols and have some similarities with them. To illustrate, people started to wear
products
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from Adidas more frequently when Messi started to advertise
this
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brend
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brand
.
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, people feel more satisfied that they have
opportunity
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to purchase the same clothes as their
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sport
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idol.
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, not all
comanies
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companies
produce
the
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apply
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good quality
of
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the
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apply
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products
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. Nowadays we can collide with different companies and some of them manufacture the worst quality of their
products
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which can lead bad consequences for customers. For
examle
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example
, there are
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variety
varity
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of medical drugs which is advertised and recommended to consume. But they may contain substances
which
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could harm
health
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the health
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of humans.
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is not only diadventegous for consumers but
also
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sport
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celebrities who can
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.
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, some
products
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should not be promoted, especially by famous sportsmen, because they are made of poor quality. In conclusion,
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there are some drawbacks that famous
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sport
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sports
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players advertise
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sport
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sports
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products
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,
benefits
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the benefits
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outweigh
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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