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You were doing a short course at another country. All of a sudden, you had to leave the course and fly back to your home country. Write a letter to your teacher, and in your letter – express your gratitude – explain why you had to leave – explain what part of the course you enjoyed the most

#course #country #home #teacher #gratitude #part
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Dear instructor, I
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this
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 letter finds you well . I am writing to express my gratitude Because I
had
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learnt a lot from
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last
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course
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which
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 I enrolled . My name is Navdeep and I am your student in the
course
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 Cooking.
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,
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this
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course
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 is about to end next month .
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 night ,I got
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call from my mother and I found she
was
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sufferring
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suffering
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 for
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last
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 few days due I want to visit home and fulfil my
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responsibility
 to take care
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 mom.
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 , I have learnt a lot from
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course
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 now I
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able to prepare my own food and
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,
in
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last
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 week when I
cook
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 for my friend Shiv I got good reviews for my cooking skills. I enjoyed the time when you showed us
live
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 demo
how
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 to marinate chicken and fry.I remember those moments in my whole life. In the
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, I want to thank you for the guidance and support I got during the
course
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.Hope you understand my problem. Yours sincerely, Navdeep
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Language Accuracy
Pay attention to verb tenses to ensure consistency throughout the letter. For example, 'learnt' should be 'learned' for better clarity.
Coherence and Cohesion
Consider using connectors and transition words to enhance the flow of ideas between paragraphs.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure all paragraphs express a single idea concisely, improving coherence.
Task Achievement
The letter clearly addresses all the prompts, expressing gratitude, explaining the reason for leaving, and sharing course highlights.
Coherence and Cohesion
The closing and greeting are appropriately structured, adding a polite and formal tone to the letter.
Task Achievement
The tone of the letter is suitable for the context, maintaining politeness and respect throughout.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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