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Do you think it is better for students to work before their university study? Why? Use reasons and specific examples to support this.

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Many
students
 take a gap by working before going to
university
 these days. It may be controversial for some
people
 who think
students
 might not be familiar anymore with their study by taking a gap by working.
However
, the advantages of working before
university
 outweigh the disadvantages in my opinion and I am going to state the interpretations. To commence, there are some
students
 who have financial problems and some families cannot support them for
university
 fees. In
this
 case, working and earning themselves after achieving a degree is the best solution.
In addition
, the
students
 can get experience from working so, they will be familiar with the solutions to difficult problems and they can
also
 be autonomous learners as well. To illustrate, there are many research projects in higher education in which the
students
 have to synthesise the sources themselves.
Students
 who have already worked in
this
 field can discriminate between the sources so that they might have a great GPA in
university
 life.
In addition
, they can supplement their education with
further
 education
such
 as A levels, SAT, GED and others.
This
 may help them get a considerable image when they apply for jobs. Many companies are seeking employees who have much more experience than others, nowadays. It is obvious that there may be many job prospects for those
students
 who work early before going to
university
. They can get to know what kinds of
people
 are
in
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 work and the fact that nobody can be judged
with
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 their looks.
For example
,
people
 with friendly looks can
also
 be cruel to others. To conclude, I agree with the statement that it is better to work before their
university
 study because they can get an experience of working life as well as the true personality of the
people
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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