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Foreign visitors should pay more than local visitors for cultural and historical attractions. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#visitors #attractions
It sometimes appears that
tourist
 attraction sites
such
 as museums, historic sites, and national parks impose extra charges on foreign
visitors
 compared to local citizens. I completely disagree with
this
 idea. the reasons for
this
 are twofold. From a point of view, it may seem, most cultural and historic places are owned by governments, so they use grants that come from local residents' taxes.
This
 amount of the budget most of the
time
 is lower than their need to preserve permanent monuments and other historical items. That's why they have to sell tickets to make more money. While the idea of earning extra money from foreign
visitors
 because local people give a part of their ticket price in tax can resolve the problem in a short period of
time
. But as strong policy for a long
time
 is absolutely wrong. After a short
time
, tourists feel inequality and dissatisfaction in terms of costs, especially in
tourist
 attraction tickets.
this
 feeling of discrimination in many of them may have a negative effect on the number of
visitors
 to that
country
.
Moreover
, tourism is a vibrant industry that has a significant positive impact on the economy.
for instance
, when a person as a
tourist
 traveled to a
country
, not only does he or she spend money to visit
manuments
Correct your spelling
monuments
 and sightseeing scenery but pays a lot for accommodation food, and souvenirs. A happy
tourist
 results in encouraging friends and family or using social media to invite other people to take a trip there.
On the other hand
, if that person feels dissatisfied and discriminated against, may try to persuade people to decline to go there.
This
 situation can result in irreparable damage to the economy of the
country
. By way of conclusion, the observation of equality between
visitors
 from another
country
 and local
visitors
 can induce most of them to go there. Governments should
therefore
 try to upgrade their facilities and build new places,
such
 as local exhibits or parks, rather than forcing foreigners to pay more.
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