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The use of illegal drugs such as heroin and cocaine are becoming more and more common in many countries what are some of the problems associated with drug abuse and what are some of the possible solutions

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Drug abuse is becoming increasingly serious in many nations
although
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 drugs
threatens
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 many societies their
effects
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 can
also
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 be combated
successful
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this
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 essay at some of the problems caused by
drugs
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drug
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 use
on
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 society and suggest some solution to the problems In
conclusion
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 drug abuse is a serious issue because it causes harmful
effects
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 on
people
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 health and
people
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 who are high often commit
crime
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a crime
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 the best approaches to deal with it are to educate
people
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 about its damaging
effects
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 and
also
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 for the government to ensure all
people
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 are aware of the consequences through public service advertising
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 the problems
is
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 unlikely to be entirely eliminated in the short term these are concrete steps to reduce the
effects
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 it is having on the current society
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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