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Many cities are currently facing a serious housing shortage. What are some of the reasons for this shortage and what solution can you suggest.

#cities #shortage
In the recent era, because of all the developments in ,science the world is growing at a fast pace.
this
 had led to some issues, containing unavailability of housing and shelter.
this
 essay is going to shed some light on
this
 problem and the influential factors causing it and is
also
 going to cover some suggestions to solve each issue.
To begin
 with, it is well-known that due to the latest achievement in science and medicine the average length of human life is getting higher
this
 has
also
 led families to have more children.
as a result
population
 of humans is growing dramatically.
in contrast
, most cities are not designed for
this
 rate of
population
 growth and are facing issues like habitat for the citizens. to continue, there are many other reasons that people are homeless despite the availability of homes and one of them is the value of land and apartments.
in other words
, in most developing countries folks can not afford to have a house.
for example
, in
Iran
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 there are many homeless people due to poverty
although
 there are many empty houses available.
However
, there are many solutions that can come to action.
firstly
, it is recommended for the developing countries to cultivate the society, not to have children if they can not support them or if the
population
 is growing immensely. to make it more tangible, in a country like
,
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china the idea of having one or no children in young families is fairly popularized due to economic problems they face because of their dense
population
.
secondly
, in sense of affordability, governments should grant a budget for the homeless populations and provide shelter for them until they can afford it on their own.
for example
, it is a regulation in many countries to provide free shelter for citizens in order to overcome
this
 problem. All in all, it is probable for cities to encounter problems
such
 as habitat because of
population
 growth or economic issues. but governments can overcome
this
 problem by cultivating people or by considering some budget for habitation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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