The gap between the rich and the poor is growing. What problem does this create? What can be done to tackle them?

Over the past
century
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the gap between rich and poor has extremely increased all over the world, mainly, because of globalization and
monopolization
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the monopolization
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of economies.
This
essay will focus on negative consequences which emerged from
this
trend and how to cope with
this
problem.
First
of all, unequal distribution of wealth always causes polarization and social tension in society,
thus
it does not help to maintain peace and order. Large poorest parts of society are living in insecure inhumane conditions, trying to cover their basic needs in food and clothes. At the same time, the smallest group of people who owns the bulk of wealth
,
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can enjoy a life of luxury. Apparently, increasing crime becomes a real danger for everyone, despite one's social status.
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,
well-known
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the well-known
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slums of Rio de Janeiro have been the place where their inhabitants come across
such
things as drug
sale
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sales
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and everyday murders. {
Secondly
, children from rich families have an access to quality education that obviously guarantee them better-paid positions in
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future career.
Such
an advantage at the start scales up disparity even more with each
next
generation.
For instance
, the annual price for education in reputable universities of
US
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the US
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starts from $100
thousands
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, only 5% of
americans
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Americans
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can afford
such
expenses}. In order to change
this
situation
to
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better
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the better
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, national policies and institutions should be used.
Experience
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of some north
Europe
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European
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countries has demonstrated that implementing progressive taxes significantly corrects redistribution of capitals.
Likewise
, providing a minimum wage by the law and ensuring supportive benefits by the government for low-paid sectors and small businesses contribute a lot in decreasing
of
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income inequity.
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, Finland holds
first
place in
happiness
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the happiness
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index, because of guaranteed free access for everyone to high-quality education, financial support and balanced taxes for companies and individuals. In conclusion, no one can deny the major role and responsibility of
state
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the state
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in setting rules which foster more or less equal standards of living and reduce criminal activity.
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