One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people is living longer and life expectancy is increasing. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
In contemporary society,
with
the development of Change preposition
apply
technology led
the medical domain Add a hyphen
technology-led
witness
Fix the infinitive
to witness
a
significant growth. Some Remove the article
apply
people
think that will make humanity have longer life whereas it is a drawbacks
.
The growth in Change the noun form
drawback
life
expectancy of Correct article usage
the life
population
actually affects the whole world in certain cases. The better medical care comes multiple Add an article
the population
issue
of heath are handled, Change to a plural noun
issues
for example
, in the past, many humans died from fatal diseases, but these day
, most of them can be cured. In fact, there will be more older Change the determiner
this day
these days
people
, various sources to sustain these geriatric people
need to be considered. Such
as food or space to live will become rarer time to time. Meanwhile, some elders need working
to keep alive but their productivity will not be as high as the employment expected. Wrong verb form
work
Therefore
, many countries might probably face starvation and poverty.
On the contrary
, the benefit of increasing the
humankind lifespan can not be denied. With the Correct article usage
apply
currently
speed of Change the adverb
current
researching
, the healthy time of older Replace the word
research
people
will last
longer. The experience and knowledge of the elder are very useful in terms of economy as well as science. Furthermore
, unlike many people
doubting the working ability of the elder, because of the insight, they can solve the problems easily. Likewise
, the operation will be smoother if they are trusted in the right place. On the other hand
, human
race is Add an article
the human
emotional
creature, no one want to see their family die, Correct article usage
an emotional
that is
an aspect of working motivation. At
Change preposition
As
the
result, practically most of the troubles Correct article usage
a
people
concerned
about above are solvable and even these Add a missing verb
are concerned
advantage
make a great contribution to human progress.
In conclusion, according to my perspectives, some Fix the agreement mistake
advantages
people
may believe the older people
make more complications, but i
strongly suppose the positive effect of the elder Change the capitalization
I
Correct your spelling
bring
bringed
will totally overweigh the weakness.Correct your spelling
brought
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