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Some think that a country's success is completely dependent on economic progress. While others believe that other factors are also important. What are the different factors contributing to the success of a country? Do you believe that one factor is more important than other.

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The
progress
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 of any organization depends greatly on its value system, same with any government.
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, for any
Nation
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 to succeed they must put in place some
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factors
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. Personally, while I do not think that any factor is more important than the other, I am of the opinion that every factor is important to make a country great.
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 economic prosperity is important in showing the success of a
nation
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, other
factors
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 like social
progress
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 and rule of law are very important. The social
progress
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 index shows how well a
Nation
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 is serving its population.
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the
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economically rich countries like the United Kingdom and
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 States have shown poor social
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 due to the high rate of unemployment and expensive cost of living and housing. As
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 what is the use of wealth on paper that does not serve the people?
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, I believe that all
factors
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 are important as they all contribute to the growth of a society.
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, Venezuela was rich and promising among its neighbouring countries, when the rule of law became disrespected, research showed that their economy began to decline mainly due to lawlessness. To
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 end, to maintain a peaceful, orderly and prosperous
nation
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 all
factors
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 need to be in check. To conclude, I believe that for a
nation
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 to be truly great, it has to check all important boxes, especially the one that concerns the people.
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, I think that economic
progress
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 may not be enough as no factor should outshine the other.
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