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Governments should give a basic income to all citizens to live on, whether employed or unemployed. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

A basic income should be allocated to all the residents by governments to fulfil their necessities of
life
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 regardless of their employment status.
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 well-paid jobs have their significance, I consider that the higher authorities should be considerate enough to ease the
life
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 of their citizens. Providing a basic amount of
money
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 to all nationals is important for the following reasons.
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, nowadays the financial strain is increasing. Everything is becoming more expensive day by day. In
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 a situation if someone suffers a health issue,
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, a person due to some sudden accident becomes handicapped and loses his
job
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, if at
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 time the higher authorities provide the person with some health subside or some
money
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, it will become much easier for him/her to manage their lives.
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, due to advancements in the field of information technology, a lot of machinery is replacing humans, leading to a higher rate of unemployment. To illustrate
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, my sister recently lost her
job
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 in
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packaging department because a robot has been introduced at her workplace for that purpose, and being a resident of a developing country, she has no
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 facility to contact, so she is having a very tough time.
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, to get a decent
job
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, one must have a good education level and getting
education
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 is becoming difficult these days due to its high cost,
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 even a lot of gifted students are compelled to leave their higher studies, ultimately making it almost impossible for them to compete in the
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 market. To illustrate it
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, one of my cousins, being unaffordable had to leave his university and despite being smart, he is still unemployed and is not able to live a good standard
life
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.
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, I think that governments must provide a handsome amount of
money
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 to their residents in order to ensure the availability of food, education and residential facilities to all the citizens. In conclusion,
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 people have their views, I think that the higher authorities should make a
committe
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committee
 to address these issues and should emphasise to provide a basic amount of
money
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 to all its citizens whether employed or unemployed in order to make
life
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 worth living for them.

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