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Without capital punishment (the death penalty) our lives are less secure and crimes of violence increase. Capital punishment is essential to control violence in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Nowadays, there is considerable debate on ever-increasing
crimes
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society
. In
this
 regard, some people assert that capital punishment is the answer to curb the
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rate
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 of
crimes
 and improve security.
However
, I disagree with
this
 statement because alternate punishments and
counseling
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seems
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 to be better options.
Firstly
,
severity
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 of
crime
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 shall be considered before concluding the punishment. Can we hang a person if he or she has committed a petty
crime
? No,
this
 is not justifiable.
Hence
, to decrease the
violence
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to
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this
, where it was printed about a survey which alleged that 95
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 of prisoners after spending 2 years in jail are willing to live a civilized life
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 if released.
Therefore
, to restrain the
violence
 in the
society
, imprisonment of
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 period tends to be a better option than hanging the offender till death.
Secondly
,
counseling
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 the criminal may change the
criminals
 which
further
 could lead to
alter
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 the rate of
crimes
 in
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society
. Listening to
criminals
 and showing empathy towards them could be one of
options
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the options
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 to minimize the
violence
 being spread in
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society
. Through
this
, root causes of
crimes
 may be found and necessary action could be initiated so that these
crimes
 shall not happen in future leading to
safer
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 and
crime
-free environment.
For example
,
Last
 year, a rehabilitation program was started by local police of Delhi where 4 sessions
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 held by
crime
 experts with
criminals
 and it was found that in most
of
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cases
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the cases
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crime
 was committed by law-breakers to prevent their family from
hunger-death
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.
Hence
,
counseling
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counselling
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 the law-offenders is
suitable
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a suitable
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 way to change them and
the
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society
's safety
concern
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. To conclude, it can be reiterated that there are more effective ways to treat
criminals
 and make
society
 a better place to live.
Hence
, capital punishment is not a concrete solution to end
violence
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the
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society
.
Submitted by Pooja Dhindsa on

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