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Many people prefer to spend the money they get rather than save it for their future. What are the reasons? Is this positive or negative development?

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community
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 want to live their life in
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 similar way as riches. Humankind expends cash rather
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 some of it for the future. A lot of folk like to spend cash on their luxury. They do not have over thinking about the far future cause they do not have any vision
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 tomorrow will bring for them so they decided to spend the fund and enjoy
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life.
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 a positive and negative way depends on their
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personality
 and the way they live.
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 the positive side, they will not feel that they are inferior to others.
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, it is negative because no one will know what
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next
 and they do not know if they falling into a financial crisis.
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 people need to learn how to save their wealth and learn to save some of their money for the future. For the days when they will need payment
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they
not
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 ask other people
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 help them or to take a loan from a bank. The community should keep some cash for the time to come .
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