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Some people say that protecting the environment is the government’s responsibility. Others believe that every individual should be responsible for it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, it is increasingly common to see that
climate
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 is
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 of the most problematic factors facing our planet,
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 which gets the attention of society. Some
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 believe that each person as an individual can contribute to help prevent environmental issues while others think that it is the governments and large companies’ responsibility to take
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 and create a difference. The following paragraphs will discuss both
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views and present the reasons for my argument. On the
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 hand,
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 themselves can help reduce global
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 by being responsible for what they are doing and figuring out the solutions to improve environmental quality. To be more specific,
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, especially those who live in cities, could use public transport more often to reduce the emissions from personal vehicles
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 as motorbikes or cars. In Vietnam,
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, motorbikes are being used widely and if
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 use buses
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, the air quality might improve.
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, governments are responsible for implementing rules in protecting and preserving the environment for residents and
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 placing a range of restrictions on every establishment or company. Meanwhile, major business concerns can invest in environmental projects and campaigns to indirectly preserve and protect the environment. Vinamilk,
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, is
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 of the biggest corporations in Vietnam that has sponsored a great deal of
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–planting projects and has made considerable progress in increasing the number of trees in Vietnam. To sum up, I believe that both individuals and authorities should take action to help prevent
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. I propose that both the administrative authorities and the
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 should work hand-in-hand to cope with
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 widespread problem of
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